This story is way too good. The slow built-up burn from the casually creepy remark in a store to the unhinged gore at the end is perfect. I love your writing style, and some of your phrasings are going to stick with me for a long time. A magnetic Labubu. Incredible.
Truly creepy. Just that little bit of information she knew about the main character. Ugh. I loved the descriptions of these weird sacks of flesh, especially with the car scene. Also had a good chuckle at the argument with the kid in the shop.
Ooof. You write unravelling minds scarily well (but also, the mundane backdrop that often breeds them). This slow ramping-up had me hooked from the very first line. Awesome stuff.
Great descriptions. That last scene felt like Butch running over Marcellus in Pulp Fiction. I like the opening: "as if a gust of wind had pushed them all inside". Now I know what a Labubu is too.
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AUUGGHH that was horrifying. Not everyone can write horror this good. From the mundane to the terrifying. Horror grows best in the mundane.
Glad you enjoyed it!
Must be re-read. I'm still fixated on the final confrontation and the Labubu reference. Yes, they are terrifying.
Thanks for reading! I agree, these things are scary.
This story is way too good. The slow built-up burn from the casually creepy remark in a store to the unhinged gore at the end is perfect. I love your writing style, and some of your phrasings are going to stick with me for a long time. A magnetic Labubu. Incredible.
Thank you, I’m so glad you enjoyed it! Beware of sticky things haha
I'll never look at a Labubu the same way again.
GOOD!
Truly creepy. Just that little bit of information she knew about the main character. Ugh. I loved the descriptions of these weird sacks of flesh, especially with the car scene. Also had a good chuckle at the argument with the kid in the shop.
Great details for everything too.
Thanks!!! Glad you enjoyed the details :)
Just subscribed, Saint-Lazare. One story, this one, is all it took. I saw those pig eyes...Very well done and looking forward to reading more. - Jim
I'm very honored! Thank you for your comment, glad you enjoyed it.
Ooof. You write unravelling minds scarily well (but also, the mundane backdrop that often breeds them). This slow ramping-up had me hooked from the very first line. Awesome stuff.
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻
...the shift from shop banality to raw horror felt seamless.
Glad you enjoyed it!
Your writing is so wonderfully descriptive. I can always imagine myself right in the scene, which is horrifying, of course, but very effective.
Sorry!!! But thanks too 😅
Diabolical ending.
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Great descriptions. That last scene felt like Butch running over Marcellus in Pulp Fiction. I like the opening: "as if a gust of wind had pushed them all inside". Now I know what a Labubu is too.
Thanks for the comment, I really appreciate being compared to Tarantino! Sorry for the Labubu though 😬
So. Good!
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Great premise, and you really delivered. Incredible and unique descriptions, as always.
Thank you 🤍🤍🤍
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